When I was a child my family moved to a big old two-floor house, with big empty rooms and creaking floorboards. Both my parents worked so I was often alone when I came home from school. One early evening when I came home the house was still dark. I called out, “Mum?” and heard her sing song voice say “Yeeeeees?” from upstairs. I called her again as I climbed the stairs to see which room she was in, and again got the same “Yeeeeees?” reply.
We were decorating at the time, and I didn’t know my way around the maze of rooms but she was in one of the far ones, right down the hall. I felt uneasy, but I figured that was only natural so I rushed forward to see my mum, knowing that her presence would calm my fears, as a mother’s presence always does. Just as I reached for the handle of the door to let myself in to the room I heard the front door downstairs open and my mother call “Sweetie, are you home?” in a cheery voice. I jumped back, startled and ran down the stairs to her, but as I glanced back from the top of the stairs, the door to the room slowly opened a crack. For a brief moment, I saw something strange in there, and I don’t know what it was, but it was staring at me.
i liked it! – short&sweet!
5/5
This sounds like it took inspiration from “I Heard It Too”. In the story, a girl starts to go downstairs after hearing her mother call for her. [spoiler]Then, another woman pulls her into a closet, and says, “I heard it too.”, as the woman was her real mother, and the one downstairs was some sort of creature, imitating her real mother.[/spoiler] I like this story. Very much. I give it a 4/5, and not a 5/5 because of the inspiration it took from I Heard It Too.
Delicious
who needs sleep anyways? Sleep is for losers, we’re champions right? No sleep! Not for the rest of my life now that i’ve read this….
[I love cliff hangers but the one at the end of the story didn’t even qualify as one. It sounded like you just stopped at the middle of the story. Additionally, it was such a short pasta that it seemed as if it had no plot. Two sentences isn’t enough to make a good pasta.] 2/10
Great pasta and well written.
Thanks for the nightmare fuel
9/10
And that’s the story of why i’m in jail for arson…
And as I looked closer, I saw it had ears and a tail. It bit down on a mangled object, I heard it again “yeeees?”
I watched as my dog walked out of the room and dropped a doll I used to play with as a child. It had a button that, when pressed, makes the doll go “yeeees?”
Honestly the scariest thing to read since I’m usually the first one home for a couple of hours
This creepypasta has also been made into a game:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ejBo9Nj-8iM
I loved it
Just throwing this out there because I saw a lot of comments saying that this was a duplicate of “Don’t go, I heard it too”: There are no new stories. There are only new ways to retell existing stories. Good vs. evil, good vs. good, evil vs. evil, good wins, bad wins, it has all been done before. Don’t get too bogged down in your own head because you power through these pastas and lose your respect for an author telling an old story in a new way.
Furthermore, I didn’t think it was really that close to “Don’t go.” It has the same spook element and the character being mimicked is the mother, but the similarity really ends there. I thought it was a tasty little pasta, and I like it as much as I liked “Don’t go.” 🙂
i didn’t like this
Cool oNE
I live in a old two story house…and I’m alone. Great….10/10
it was a little short, but it got me good, so the job was done right 🙂
Shiting bricks now.
It’s creepy but I like the story!
This would be much better if you didnt just copy a already existing pasta called “Don’t go, I heard it too”
Feels like a duplicate of “don’t go I heard it too”.