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The Cry

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The Cry

A cry woke me in the middle of the night. It’s as if a girl was trying hard to muffle her desperate cries of help so as to keep something from hearing her. My heart started to pound with fear as I was reminded of some scenes from horror films involving creepy, crying ghost girls. I badly wanted to wake my room mate who was sleeping across my bed but it is impossible to wake her up for she is such a heavy sleeper.

I didn’t dare open my eyes. I’ve heard some creepy stories about our dormitory but I don’t want them to experience first hand. So like a frightened child I hastily covered myself with my blanket and turned to face the wall. Ignoring the cries, I willed my scared self to get some sleep.

I woke up from an uneasy sleep the next day to see my room mate with a strange, frightened expression on her face.

“So you heard it too?” I hastily asked. “That creepy crying sounded horrible! I wasn’t able to sleep properly last night!”

With a haunted voice, she replied, “Th-that was me who was crying when I saw you levitating from your bed.”

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LISA COLLINS
LISA COLLINS
4 years ago

wow that’s weird

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Blacknoodles23
6 years ago

well actually Th3Fall3nAng3l5 he didn’t say that he made it, he just doesn’t know who did. BTW great story

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Claudia
6 years ago

Wow O-O i wasn’t expecting that. Great story. Gave me goosebumps.

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TheMadGamer
6 years ago

I’m a wizard!!!!

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Chaseti127
6 years ago

Loved it but why didn’t she feel it lifting it her up and how did she see her getting lifted up if she was such a heavy sleeper?;)

kamrynanastasia
kamrynanastasia
6 years ago

I’ve heard a story similar to this. Maybe if you had changed the ending to something more believable. As a previous user had noted, there’s no way she wouldn’t have noticed that she wasn’t laying on the bed. It could have had maybe a spirit or maybe even blood covered walls (although cliché, it might have had more of an affect) Over all, it isn’t the worst story I’ve read.

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Omfi
7 years ago

Loved it 10/10

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RedPandaSaysBOO
7 years ago

Mindfuck to the MAX!

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Eminems
7 years ago

i would advise being a little more descriptive. I would love to hear more of ur work! Love it! 🙂

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Who_needs_sleep
7 years ago

At least its original

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Mind officially blown. Kinda reminds me of Ghostbusters, when the chick is levitating over the bed.

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HorrorHype
8 years ago

Ehh.. That was just random.
1/5

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Th3Fall3nAng3l5
8 years ago

Oh yay! Another plagiarist! Write your own story or don’t post. You’re lucky I’m not going to report you.

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nana
8 years ago

I actually like how the twist went. Here are just the things I thought after reading:

Realizing that the girl just somehow indirectly told her roommate, “You’re crying is creepy and horrible!” was a bit of a mood-breaker, even almost funny.

I’m wondering how she didn’t realize she wasn’t touching the bed with her back and even when she turned to her side.

Still, I appreciate shorts with twists that go like this.

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slymetalpond
8 years ago

I loved it! Hit me good at the end! ~taco

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SmileDog
9 years ago

I love the twist

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Cream
9 years ago

hahaha : D got me good, real nice

Princess_Chica
Princess_Chica
9 years ago

what the…

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vanoss
9 years ago

not very good..i didn’t like the ending

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PolisKanin
10 years ago

The only crying in this story was me when I read how bad it was.