When I was 6, everything was simple. Just like any other 6 year old’s life. Although, there was this time when… Well, I actually don’t know what happened. It was a June 13th, 1999. It was cold, even though it was summer. I was alone in my basement playing my Gameboy with one of those plug-in light attachments. Nothing really out of the ordinary, until it started to rain. In fact, it was a rather big storm. I was in the basement, while my parents were upstairs, when the lights flickered. At the time, didn’t think of much of it and continued to play. I was actually about to beat the 3rd gym leader when the all of the lights in my house just shut off. As a 6 year old, I was pretty frightened. Nothing like this had ever happened before. It was so dark, so eerie. I had this feeling of nervousness shoot throughout my body. I ran upstairs as quickly as I could, while carrying the Gameboy as it was my only source of light, and looked for my parents.
They were not there. I cried out their names. Nothing. I ran into every room looking for them, and they weren’t there. Then, I started to hear things. Tapping on the glass, footsteps, and creaks in the floor. Someone or something must’ve broken into the house. I couldn’t process what was going on, I just… I sat on the flooring crying, burying my face in my arms. I kept crying until… I heard something coming up the stairs, rather slowly. I shined my light on it. Big white eyes, very tall. That was not one of my parents. My heart stopped. What…is…? As it almost reached the top of the stairs, and at this point I was paralyzed with fear and I couldn’t move, the lights shot back on. It… was staring at me with its huge eyes that looked like they were beating like a heart, and its face skin was partially torn off, revealing its muscle. I could see huge columns of saliva coming from its mouth. It was gesturing with its finger for me to come over to it while a sickening grin was on its face. My parents then came in through the front door, as they had gone to the neighbor’s house and I turn and look back at the stairs to find… nothing…
Nope nope nope. Things with all white eyes beckoning you to come with them… nope nope nope!
nice story but a lot of monsters have that description so my rating is 6/10
Terrible, why in the world would any parent not look after the child during a power outage let alone both parents leaving said 6 year old home alone while they run to the neighbors regardless of how close they live or quick they’ll be …just wasn’t believable to me 2/10
Was an okay pasta but the one thing that keeps bothering me is the ending. [spoiler]Why were the parents at the neighbors house leaving their 6 year old alone by themselves?[/spoiler]
Gameboys don’t give out light! Other than that, pretty good.
Interesting
great story i enjoyed it a lot good job
i dont go in my attic because it creaks nope nope nope
this was Great pasta it is original but still very interesting and fancy. 9/10
why would the parents leave the six year old in the house only in the dark that’s just bs this story was not good to me 4/10
Suspenseful, but could have had a bit more elaboration towards the end. Other than that, great story.
whysoserious’ picture is sort of liked the monster you described, adding substance to the image I imagined of the monster you described.
Sinshana’s comment disappoints me. As someone who’s read a lot of pasta, yes – there are better ones than this out there.
However, this one still spooked me quite thoroughly. I can relate to being scared in the dark having to use my worm light as a source of light – hiding under my covers while I play pokemon.
Pretty good pasta! Also scary creature! 8/10
This is why I don’t go in my basement. Thats a no no in my house.
Unoriginal and not particularly well-written. Child alone in house. Sees a thing. Gets scared. Parents come home. Thing gone. It would have been better if there was some sort of context, or a theme (one directly involving the power outage for example!), or even a chase or an attempt to save oneself. Nothing. It’s like no effort was put into this. This would impress only people who had never gotten a bite of good pasta.
2/10
Pretty damn frighting
It seems that the scariest kinds of monsters are pale, tall, hairless beings. But the little twists on it make it unique, and the description creates a horrifying image in my mind. I feel that this is a great basis for something, but could use a little tune-up. 7/10.
Decent pasta, reminds me of experiences as a six-year old..but with beetles., very tasty, 8/10